Assignment #15 FINAL REFLECTION!!!

I feel that I did grow as a writer in terms of organizational skill. I think being together a coherent paper that makes sense to you and to make an essay that works for the reader is no easy task. Often when we write out essays or papers we fail to completely stick to the hypothesis. We sometimes forget the argument were actually making or fail to completely understand the prompted we are reading. An example of this might be is when we go off on tangents or talk about something that has very little relevance. I think this skill for me has gotten better over the course of this class from my first essay to consecutive ones. I still do think I need much more help and practice when sticking to my argument. Sometimes I feel that I have a good point to make, which it very well might be, however I failed to fully integrate in to my thesis or the main argument I am making. In the third essay, I didnt completely have a good understanding of Murray article and I made suggestions and statements that didn't fully offer comprehension of his article. Unclear comprehension makes for poor organization.
When we have good organizational skill, along with sticking with the argument we are making we should get a very clear essay. That would make a reader understand fully the meaning of your essay. I have improve with this over this semester but I still need much practice..

Assignment #13 Analyzing and writing arguments.

I analyzed Charles Murray's essay "Should the Obama Generation Drop Out."
 Murray used a tone is his article that showed passion and belief to what he was saying. I think having a tone that shows passion gives the reader believability and a sense of truth as to what the author is saying. A reader can appreciate the argument that much more when it's is written in that tone. Secondly, Murray does a good job of giving background information about the topic, which allowed the reader to have more understanding and makes an argument that much more efficient. Murray talks about Who is going to college and why students are dissuaded from school. The reader now has sufficient understanding of the argument the writer is going to make. Lastly, Murray has good basses for making his argument because their is an emotional component making his argument stronger. He talks about students not having meens to pay for college or the right role models helping a student make a discussion to go to school. They still deserve to put bread on their tables. Emotion makes the reader more interested in the argument and it gives reader a better and more meaningful appreciation. I think I will want to incorporate the use of emotion in to my argument to better aid the reader to fully appreciate my point of view.

Assignment #12 Thinking critically about evedence

My thesis is: I feel that the government should offer insensitive, such as tax break for people that register themselves as organ donors.  
One of the strongest parts about this essay for me is the emotional and relating aspect. Since I had a heart transplant, I am able to argue my point using a lot of detail about my personal experience going through that tremendous ordeal. That is a  great way to capture an audience and a reader. I also made good arguments as to why the government should offer this type of insensitive. The government ultimately was created for the betterment of the people. I give examples as to how the government has been set up to help the people, such as Medicare, Medicaid and Social Security. 

One  of the weakest evidence is I fail to mention someone's view of not being an organ donor. Since I have such a biased opinion about this topic, I discount why someone would stay away from organ donation. I can talk about possible religious reasons for not become a donor or just the fact that someone may not feel comfortable with being put on a list. The government may not want to get involved with religion or someones personal ideals.
I think some of the evidence I had for the government offering an insensitive for organ donation is strong because it relates very well to a personal experience I had. As I said, that might grab the reader emotionally. I don't think I will discuss possible reasons for not being a organ donor because it will take away from my very strong personal opinion and from the heat of my argument. 

assignment 14 planing on my revision

the revision of the paper I want to do is the paper on making an argument. In that eessay I described how Charles Murray wanted to do away with the bachelors degree and make more of a vocational type boworring an accreditation for a givin field.
The strengths in my essay were that I did a good job of refuting Murray premise by giving reasons why I think the bachelors would be beneficial.  I also think I did a good job of explaing Murray initial argument, in which I was able to make my own argument. I also like the way I ended the argument my essay and how I was still able to include Murray's point of view.
My essay had plenty of weaknesses too. For one, I dont think I fully understand what Charles Murray was saying in every point he made. Also, some of points I made in my essay, I did not realate well to my thesis. Maybe I used some extra phrases that were not necessary.

I want to revise my third essay anyway to get a better grade. I think I will go to an writing tutor to help fix some of my ideas in my essay. It will a good idea to spend some time with revising my essay.

Patterns of Error- #11

Looking back at my past two graded essays I see a few errors that seem constant.
1. Sometimes i will give extra detail without relating it back to the center of the argument I Im making.
2. Sometimes I use words that don't exactly work with the contented of the sentence, and the point I'm trying to give over.
3. I can use more detail enabling the reader to see a more vivid picture.

sometimes when Im writing I don't think about how reader may understand the view-points and the detail I give. I can do a better job in tying back into the essay main argument. Maybe in the future I should better focus on the vocabulary I use. Providing more detail will allow the reader to better appreciate the words of my essay and walk away with a clearer understanding of my point- of -view.  

Week 9 My Choice What to Right about!!

The ability to write well is a tool that can be used for the rest of your life.. In almost all professional lines off work, one has to have to know how to write coherently with obvious proper English. One sends emails, writes reports and feels out countless amounts of statements on relating to the line of work they are doing. Someone is going to read what you wrote, whether it be a colleague, a boss, a client or a patient. If you do not know how to write correctly then that person has every rite to question your ability as an educated individual and if you really have the capacity to do the line of work that you were heard for. Unlike mathematics, writing in good English had a direct application to you as a student and as a job holder. Writing relates in some way to any future benefit that you would want to gain from.  For example, when you feel out an application for school or a job, you are often to ask to write an essay. Depending on the quality and the contexts of the essay that can determine if you are a considerable applicant for either the school or the job. Math is a subjects that is often equated to English writing. However, math doesn't have the same necessity and application that writing does. I can not sit here and knock the multiple benefits on the subjects of mathematics. But maybe an argument can be made that schools should have a slightly greater focus on writing because of it's universal and plentiful benefits that ranges far more then what math has to offer.   

Thinking About Arguments..

I the article Should the Obama Generation Drop Out, the author talks about Obama message, in regards that one should do when applying for a job. The author makes the argument that Bachelors degrees has little merit. The main point the author makes is that a regular B.S degree virtually counts for nothing when being prepared for a job. People just don't have the appropriate skills to apply for a job. The Bachelor's degree is too broud. He also makes the argument that most people find it very difficult to complete college level work. He says, that people that are being successful with their degree are the one that are very intelligent. Even smart students, the author says, don't have a lot of motivation because their B.S degree will not open up a lot of doors.
The author says that the best solution for this is to throw out the Bachelor's degrees. Training someone in a specific field and testing them and giving them that credential will be much more beneficial in being prepared for a job. He says, that this will benefit both the student and the company looking for work. The applicant would be much more suited for the job then a regular B.S or B.A degree will have taught  them. In turn, many more people who wouldn't other wise go to college, will no go get secondary education because they will feel that can accomplish the skills and the education to get a job right away.

I chose this article because I didn't really relate to the other two articles.  Also, I'm always interested in learning about education since I was brought up to show much importance to it. I thought it was an interesting article but I didn't fully agree with it. I feel the a Bachelors degree will always do much for a person.. It will teach someone how to work and how to be motivated. I feel even though you don't have the direct skills needed to start work right away, you will still have the ability to pick it up quickly. Education not only teaches a person material but also teaches one how to think. I will enjoy writing an essay explaining this idea in more detail.