Patterns of Error- #11

Looking back at my past two graded essays I see a few errors that seem constant.
1. Sometimes i will give extra detail without relating it back to the center of the argument I Im making.
2. Sometimes I use words that don't exactly work with the contented of the sentence, and the point I'm trying to give over.
3. I can use more detail enabling the reader to see a more vivid picture.

sometimes when Im writing I don't think about how reader may understand the view-points and the detail I give. I can do a better job in tying back into the essay main argument. Maybe in the future I should better focus on the vocabulary I use. Providing more detail will allow the reader to better appreciate the words of my essay and walk away with a clearer understanding of my point- of -view.  

Week 9 My Choice What to Right about!!

The ability to write well is a tool that can be used for the rest of your life.. In almost all professional lines off work, one has to have to know how to write coherently with obvious proper English. One sends emails, writes reports and feels out countless amounts of statements on relating to the line of work they are doing. Someone is going to read what you wrote, whether it be a colleague, a boss, a client or a patient. If you do not know how to write correctly then that person has every rite to question your ability as an educated individual and if you really have the capacity to do the line of work that you were heard for. Unlike mathematics, writing in good English had a direct application to you as a student and as a job holder. Writing relates in some way to any future benefit that you would want to gain from.  For example, when you feel out an application for school or a job, you are often to ask to write an essay. Depending on the quality and the contexts of the essay that can determine if you are a considerable applicant for either the school or the job. Math is a subjects that is often equated to English writing. However, math doesn't have the same necessity and application that writing does. I can not sit here and knock the multiple benefits on the subjects of mathematics. But maybe an argument can be made that schools should have a slightly greater focus on writing because of it's universal and plentiful benefits that ranges far more then what math has to offer.   

Thinking About Arguments..

I the article Should the Obama Generation Drop Out, the author talks about Obama message, in regards that one should do when applying for a job. The author makes the argument that Bachelors degrees has little merit. The main point the author makes is that a regular B.S degree virtually counts for nothing when being prepared for a job. People just don't have the appropriate skills to apply for a job. The Bachelor's degree is too broud. He also makes the argument that most people find it very difficult to complete college level work. He says, that people that are being successful with their degree are the one that are very intelligent. Even smart students, the author says, don't have a lot of motivation because their B.S degree will not open up a lot of doors.
The author says that the best solution for this is to throw out the Bachelor's degrees. Training someone in a specific field and testing them and giving them that credential will be much more beneficial in being prepared for a job. He says, that this will benefit both the student and the company looking for work. The applicant would be much more suited for the job then a regular B.S or B.A degree will have taught  them. In turn, many more people who wouldn't other wise go to college, will no go get secondary education because they will feel that can accomplish the skills and the education to get a job right away.

I chose this article because I didn't really relate to the other two articles.  Also, I'm always interested in learning about education since I was brought up to show much importance to it. I thought it was an interesting article but I didn't fully agree with it. I feel the a Bachelors degree will always do much for a person.. It will teach someone how to work and how to be motivated. I feel even though you don't have the direct skills needed to start work right away, you will still have the ability to pick it up quickly. Education not only teaches a person material but also teaches one how to think. I will enjoy writing an essay explaining this idea in more detail.